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IELTS Writing – Band 6 IELTS Sample Essays

IELTS Essay Samples of Band 6

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Here you can find IELTS Essay samples of Band 6, written by students and graded by an IELTS teacher.

The topic of each essay appears when you hold the mouse over the link. Every essay is checked, marked, has comments and suggestions. Hold the mouse over to see suggested corrections. The teacher’s summary is at the bottom of each essay.

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IELTS essay, topic: Students from rural areas should get a subsidized university education, agree or disagree?

• IELTS Essays - Band 6

Students from rural areas often find it difficult to access university education. Some people think that it should become easier for them to study at universities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Nowadays, it is acknowledged that students from suburban areas find it tough to receive higher education. Whether it should be made easier for them to access university education becomes an ongoing concern, which incurs a highly-charged debate.

Obviously, higher education opportunities bring about benefits to students in multiple ways. For example, higher education becomes increasingly important to senior high school graduates, partly it determines if they have the competitive edge in the job market, and partly because it is seen as a guarantee of a certain level of the mental ability, from the computer literacy that is required by the most employers to the capacities of acquiring new knowledge the soonest possible which is valued by most . With a university degree, students from rural areas obtain a job easily, thereby bettering their living conditions and their family as well.

Higher education also, however, to impose a heavy burden on families since the rise in the tuition fees are increasingly beyond those families’ ability to afford. In addition, with the mounting evidence, a university degree is not always a guarantee of seizing a decent job; therefore, their living conditions are likely to able to earn back their tuition fee after graduation. people argue, students from rural areas are not well-advised to pursue a university degree. But I perceive their desire to further their education should not be disrespected and the government should subsidise them to receive higher education.

In conclusion, university education should be made fair to everyone, predicated only on their academic performance and mental abilities, rather than their financial capacities and the government should subsidise those students in need.

Teacher’s comment: Not all the parts of the task were covered. The writer’s position is relevant to task prompt, the main ideas are also relevant but not all of them are developed well enough. The information is presented coherently, it is evident that the writer progresses from one idea to another. The linking words and phrases are used in a correct way. The range of vocabulary is sufficient here. There are some attempts to use more sophisticated words but many of them are inaccurate. Even though there are some errors in grammar and punctuation, they don’t make the meaning much harder to understand. Overall, this essay seems worthy of IELTS Band 6.

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IELTS band 6.5 sample essay

Below we have a band 6.5 essay graded by an ex-IELTS examiner.

First you can read the IELTS essay , and after we break down why this essay scored a band 6.5.

if you would like to know what band score your IELTS essay would get, you can try our new online IELTS essay checking service (free) . Another option, for more detailed feedback is to send your essay to one of our ex-IELTS examiners for feedback . 

Each criteria has been considered and the sentence in the essay has been colour coded to correspond to the fours marking criteria used by the British Council / IELTS IDP .

LR - Lexical Resource CC - Cohesion and Coherence TR - Task Response GR - Grammatical Range and Accuracy

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Today, most people get married and give birth in their thirties rather than when they are younger. Is it a positive or negative development in your opinion? To what extent do you support this development?

The issue of early weddings followed by a pregnancy before thirties (LR1) has grown  in importance over the past few years (GR1) / (TR1) . This is a common dream between  many women (LR2) , but nowadays this dream is facing drastic changes due to many  factors. Globalization, economic crises and increasing population numbers (TR2)  are  contributing for that (LR3) . I strongly believe that couples need to be aware and  convicts of their situation (LR4) before decide (GR2) to have children before thirties.

LR1 - You have the right idea with paraphrasing - but it’s vital to ensure that your language use remains natural. This sounds a bit odd.

GR1 - Accurate use of the present perfect with a time expression.

TR1 - On the right track with your opening sentence.

LR2 - ? This doesn’t make sense.

TR2 - Be sure to focus on the question. It isn’t asking you why this situation came about.

LR3 - contribute to something

LR4 - Perhaps ‘convinced that it’s the right thing to do’?

GR2 - before deciding

Although an early marriage and pregnancy is a desire for many couples, there  are some factors that need to be considered (CC1). Firstly (CC2), due to the world  economic crises which made the number of available jobs decrease  considerably and also the real state industry increasing prices exponentially,  directly affecting millions of people (CC3) and their dreams of constitute (LR5) a family and  buy the first residence. Secondly, the cost of living is reaching numbers that  average salaries cannot afford (TR3). For example, a study from Boston university (TR4)  showed that nearly one third of the newlyweds in which the couples were (GR3)  below thirties, do not intend to have children. The central reason behind this is (CC4)  the uncertainty of being able to (GR4) provide a decent life for their children (LR6).

CC1 - Accurate use of ‘although’.

CC2 - Good to organise your essay with ‘Firstly…’, ‘Secondly…’.

LR5 - Take care with natural collocation - ‘dreams of having…’

CC3 - Problems with sentence structure / coherence here.

TR3 - Again, you need to focus more on whether it is a positive development rather than why it has happened.

TR4 - Good to use an example to support the point you are making.

GR3 - Accurate use of a relative clause.

CC4 - Good to link your ideas together smoothly.

GR4 - Good accuracy here.

LR6 - Natural use of vocabulary.

However (CC5), this scenario is a tendency for our reality (LR7) these days, I firmly  believe that this situation is a negative development (TR5) in the society. Many  families are being constituted late or even not starting. For example, women (TR6)  having their babies after 35 years old is a risk not only for the mother’s health (GR5),  as well for the baby (GR6) . The child can be born with malformation (TR7) and very weak  with a risk to develop diseases due to their fragile immune system (LR8) . On the  same way the mother, that can face serious health problems and also a big  risk of losing the child.

CC5 - Check the use of ‘however’ - it is not used accurately here. ‘Although’ would work.

LR7 - This sounds unnatural - problems with collocation.

TR5 - Good to respond more directly to the question.

TR6 - Good to use an example to support the point you are making.

GR5 - Very accurate sentence construction here.

GR6 - Perhaps ‘but also for that of the baby’.

TR7 - Now you are starting to answer the question better.

LR8 - Not usually hyphenated but lovely use of collocation.

To conclude (CC6 & 7), a mature decision must be made for (GR7) the couple. Not only the  desire of an early marriage with many sons but, more important than that if  they would be able to provide the basics for the children like a health  environment, education and support (TR8) . In my opinion a balance between the  desire versus reality must be taken in consideration before take a decision (TR9).  After that within the couple limits (GR8) / (LR9) , decide a proper age to get married and have their children.

CC6 - Clear use of paragraphing.

CC7 - You have introduced your final paragraph appropriately.

GR7 - by TR8 - This needs to be more directly related to the question.

TR9 - Again, task achievement could be stronger here.

GR8 - To be grammatically correct, this would need to be possessive - ‘the couple’s limits’.

LR9 - It still sounds a bit odd, though. Perhaps ‘the couple’s financial constraints’?

Probable score: 6.5 / 7.0  

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Here you will find IELTS Sample Essays for a variety of common topics that appear in the writing exam.

The model answers all have tips and strategies for how you may approach the question and comments on the sample answer.

You can also view sample essays with band scores on this page. 

Looking at IELTS essay topics with answers is a great way to help you to prepare for the test. 

These IELTS sample essays have been categorised in a way that makes it easy for you to see how certain essay question types require you to provide certain responses to ensure the question is fully answered. 

Specifically these are:

• Agree / Disagree
• Discuss Two Opinions
• Problems and Solutions
• Advantages and Disadvantages
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Agree / Disagree Type Questions

In these types of question you are given one opinion and you then have to state the extent to which you agree or disagree with that opinion:

• Advertising
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• Spending on the Arts
• Human Cloning
• Social Interaction & the Internet
• Airline Tax
• Free University Education
• Scientific Research
• Banning Smoking
• Employing Older People
• Vegetarianism
• Paying Taxes  
• Examinations or Formal Assessment 
• Multinational Organisations and Culture
• Internet vs Newspapers
• Technology Development  
• Dying of Languages
• Animal Extinction
• Truth in Relationships
• Role of Schools
• Return of Historical Artefacts

Discuss Two Opinions Type Questions

In this essay question type you are given two opinions, and you have to discuss both of these and then give your own view:

• University Education
• Reducing Crime
• Animal Rights
• Child Development
• Diet & Health
• Donating Money to Charity
• Closing Zoos   
• Becoming Independent  
• Formal and Informal Education  
• Influence of Scientists and Politicians
• Sources for Stories
• Searching for Extraterrestrial Life

Cause Type Questions

There are a variety of 'cause type' essay questions. In these you first have to give the reasons why something has happened, in other words the causes, but then discuss a different aspect of it, such as the effects, solutions or the extent to whether it is a positive or negative development:

Causes & Effects:

• Child Obesity
• Skin Whitening Creams
• Family Size
• Having Children Later in Life
• Time Away from Family

Causes and Solutions:

• Youth Crime
• Global Warming
• Paying Attention in Class
• International Travel & Prejudice 
• Museums & Historical Places
• Disappearance of Traditions
• Communication Between Generations

Causes, Pros & Cons:

• Family Closeness
• Living Alone
• Rural to Urban Migration

Problems & Solutions Type Questions

In these type of questions, instead of discussing the causes of a problem, you need to discuss the problems related to a particular issue in society, and then suggest what can be to solve these problems:

• Overpopulation
• Competing for Jobs  
• Professionals Immigrating

Advantage & Disadvantages Type Questions

In these type of questions you are asked to discuss the positive and negative sides of a particular topic. You will usually be asked this in the context of giving an opinion ( e.g. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? Is it a positive or negative development? ): 

• Traffic Problems
• Food Additives
• Computer Games
• Age Discrimination at Work  
• Children using Tablets and Computers  
• Cell Phones, Internet, & Communication  
• Working from Home 
• Eating Locally grown  Produce  
• Oil and Gas Essay  
• Peer Pressure on Young People
• Online Fraud
• Decreasing House Sizes

'Hybrid' Types of Essay Question

There are sometimes questions that don't fit easily into a particular category as above. I've called these 'hybrid', as they are of mixed character, are composed of different elements from other types of essay, or are perhaps just worded differently. 

• Protecting Old Buildings
• Animal Testing
• Fear of Crime
• Communication Technology
• Influence of Children's Friends  

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IELTS Writing task 2 band 6 essay | Technology and traditional skills

Today, we will look at another essay and see how the writer has answered the question. This task 2 band 6 essay is about the effect that technology has on people learning traditional skills. Read on to find out why this task 2 essay only scores band 6!

  When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words

Read the essay below, and then we will discuss the issues with it.

Countries all around the world have had a huge development over the decades . After several evolution , such as the industrial evolution, many new technologies have been investigated and developed over the years. Some people say that when technologies are developed, ( the traditional skills and ways of life will die out) . They also own the view that (it is pointless to try and keep traditional skills alive) . I think people should make a balance between modern technology and traditional skills.

There is no doubt that modern technology is extremely efficient, whereas traditional ways have a lower productivity . For example, the agriculture in the past mainly depends on the climate while modern technology doesn’t . If there is no rain and soil becomes dry, those plants would die in the past. However new technology can solve it by artificial rainfalls . Moreover, it takes a lot of time for people to cultivate crops by traditional ways. New technology makes it much more convenient and faster which save farmers’ time. In addition, people used to use pigeons to send envelopes to others. Nowadays, people only have to click on their phones and they can easily make a phone call or send messages to others.

However, traditional skills are also very important. Traditions embody the vulture and the country is based upon the culture. The continuation of civilization highly depends on traditions. Imagine that if Chinese people can no more speak Chinese , are they Chinese people any more? Moreover, without the traditional skills people cannot learn basic knowledge to investigate those new technologies.

  In conclusion, I think both modern technology and traditional skills are very important. People should learn traditional skills and prevent them from disappearing.

Task achievement

The writer has responded to the task and given good ideas in the first body paragraph. In the second body paragraph, however, the ideas are quite simple, need to be expanded, and more fully developed. Simple ideas do not always affect your band score, but you do need to develop them. If ideas are too simple, you may not be able to show proper development. The conclusion is simple, but the writer gives an opinion and it is relevant to the topic. Remember, the reader should know what your essay talks about and what your main ideas are just by reading the conclusion. Try to summarise the main ideas here for better task achievement.

• Addresses all parts of the task although some parts may be more fully covered than others
• Presents a relevant position although the conclusions may become unclear or repetitive
• Presents relevant main ideas but some may be inadequately developed/unclear

Coherence and cohesion

When you look at this essay, the introduction is very long. In the rest of the essay, the writer has used clear paragraphing, but transition signals are mechanical they always use the same ones ‘ However ’ and ‘ Moreover ’. It is better to use a few different transitions to avoid repeating them. They are also always the first word in the sentence. Try to change where they appear in the sentence for less mechanical writing.

• Arranges information and ideas coherently and there is a clear overall progression
• Uses cohesive devices effectively, but c ohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical
• May not always use referencing clearly or appropriately 
• Uses paragraphing, but not always logically

Lexical resource

You may notice the writer has copied bits from the question into the introduction. The examiner would ignore this language it would not help your vocabulary. The copied words also do not count, so it can make your essay shorter. Even without these words, the essay is still 261 words long, which is enough for task 2. The writer would score higher without copying and using better word choices. Shortening the introduction would also improve coherence.

Many countries around the world have experienced considerable development over the last century. A lot of new technologies have been invented and developed over the years and some people argue that traditional skills have been lost as a result. In my opinion, modern technology should be embraced, but not at the expense of traditional skills.

There are lots of word choice errors, but they do not affect communication. Some examples are: ‘ use pigeons to send envelopes ’ – ‘ envelopes ’ should be replaced with ‘ letters ’- ‘ embody the vulture ’ should be ‘ culture ’ and ‘ highly depends on’ – this is better without the word ‘ highly ’.

• Uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task
• Attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy
• Makes some errors in spelling a nd/or word formation, but they do not impede communication

Grammatical range and accuracy

Grammar is controlled quite well and there is nothing that affects communication. There is a mixture of simple and complex sentences but lots of punctuation and article errors. There is a contraction in body paragraph 1. Try not to use these in an academic essays. Also, the writer has used a ‘ rhetorical question ’- Imagine that if Chinese people can no more speak Chinese , are they Chinese people any more? . A rhetorical question is one that is not answered, and the writer may answer the question in the paragraph. However, they are most often used in speaking and informal writing, not in academic essays.

• Uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms
• Makes some errors in grammar and punctuation but they rarely reduce communication

Not all the errors have been corrected in this essay. This task 2 band 6 essay has a few noticeable problems that we have discussed. Read the essay again and see how you would improve it. If you are preparing for your IELTS test and want to find out a bit more about task 2, check out our post giving five tips to improve your IELTS writing task 2 ! Our candidate would have scored a 5 for coherence and task achievement, with grammar and vocabulary scoring 6 each, giving an overall score of 5.5. Is there anything that surprised you about this essay’s score? Have your say, and comment in the section below!  Click here for the full public IELTS task 2 writing descriptors .

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Band 6 Student Answer with Examiner’s Report

Lots of students only require a Band 6 or 6.5 in their IELTS test and I get lots of questions every week about what a Band 6 essay looks like and what is required to get a 6. I recently marked a Band 6 essay for one of our essay correction service students and you can read it below.

I have included the picture of the original essay below so you can see the original corrections and I have included the examiner’s report and sample answer. This student was able to get the Band 7 they required after following the advice below.

Task Response- Band 6

You address all parts of the task and cover both arguments. However, the question asked you to discuss both views and you spend much more time saying why children were happy and not adults.

You presented a clear position throughout the response. It was very good to see that you gave a clear thesis statement in your introduction and then used the rest of the essay to support this view. ƒ

You present, extend and support main ideas, but there was a tendency to over-generalise at times.

Suggestions –

For discussion (discuss both views) it is important that you give equal time to both views. Even if you disagree with one view, you should write one paragraph saying why you disagree. If you did this, you would have got a higher band.

One thing that you could do better is provide specific examples. The more specific you can be with your examples, the more authority your points have. You can make your examples more specific by adding dates, statistics, peoples’ names or place names. See my article below.

Be careful not to have too many ideas. Your ideas are relevant, but it is better to have fewer ideas and support these with explanations and examples, than simply list lots of ideas that are not fully developed. Examiners are looking for fully developed ideas, not lists of ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion- Band 7

You logically organise information and ideas; there is clear progression throughout. The structure that you have used really helps in this area and makes everything easy to follow and flows very nicely. However, it can be improved even more.

You use a range of cohesive devices (linking words) appropriately although there is some over-use. All linking words are used accurately and effectively, but there tends to be a reliance on them through overuse. This is not a huge problem, but the higher band scores use cohesive devices much less than you currently do.

Each paragraph presents a clear central topic and this is really helped by a topic sentence at the beginning of each paragraph.

Try using this paragraph structure for discussion questions:

Introduction • Paraphrase Question • Thesis Statement • Outline Statement (outline what you will discuss in the rest of the essay)

Discussion of first side • Main point • Explanation of main point (linked to your opinion) • Example

Discussion of second side • Main point • Explanation of main point (linked to your opinion) • Example

Conclusion • Summary of main ideas and opinion

Your use of cohesive devices is very good, but you do have a tendency to overuse them. You don’t get more marks for every cohesive device you use and in fact, you will be penalised for overusing them. Only use them when necessary. If you look at my example essays I might only use them once or twice per paragraph.

Vocabulary- Band 6

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the task such as ‘financial responsibilities’, ‘academic environment’ and ‘scientific competitions’. You attempt to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy and you make some errors in word formation, but they do not impede communication. Please see corrections above for examples of this.

You do try to use advanced vocabulary but this often leads to small mistakes. Follow the 100% rule- don’t try to use any words you are not 100% sure about. It is better to use simple words and make no mistakes than use advanced words, but in error. By 100% I mean that you should be sure about spelling, grammar, collocations, synonyms, antonyms etc.

In the long term you should think about starting a vocabulary book. This is a place where you record new vocabulary with spelling, grammar, collocations, synonyms, antonyms and example sentences to make sure you know it 100%. You can then review these new words regularly so that they become a natural part of your vocabulary.

You should also give yourself a few minutes at the end to evaluate your vocabulary and make sure you have not made any mistakes.

Finally, synonyms are important and you should try to use them, but only use them if you know that they mean exactly the same as the word you are replacing. They should also be grammatically correct. If you are not sure, just repeat the word.

Grammar- Band 5

You attempt complex sentences but these tend to be less accurate than simple sentences.

You make frequent grammatical errors and some errors can cause some difficulty for the reader.

Please see above for grammatical errors.

Suggestions-

Establish your common grammar errors and then review this grammar. There are lots of online activities you can do to practice and perfect each area you are weak in.

Also, follow the 100% rule for grammar. You should only write sentences that you know are 100% correct. If there is any doubt then you need to think about how you can express your point in a simpler way, that has no mistakes.

It is better to write in a simple way and make no mistakes, than use complex grammar and structures with frequent errors.

Overall- Band 6

Overall this was a good essay but there are some things you can do to improve in the future.

The main things you can do is to answer the question by doing what it asks you to do. In this question you have been asked to ‘Discuss both views and give your own opinion.’ You have really only discussed one of the views. You need to make it really clear to the examiner that you have discussed both views by having a separate paragraph for each.

Your coherence will also improve if you use the structure I suggested above and you should also check out the structures for the other types of essay. I have included a link for this below.

Your cohesion is very good, but remember that you don’t need to start every sentence with a linking word, one or two per paragraph is enough.

Your vocabulary and grammar are your two biggest challenges. The quick way to fixing these is to follow the 100% rule I suggest above and if you want to fix these long term I would suggest the following:

1. Read books/blogs/magazines about the common IELTS Task 2 topics, such as Education, Health and Technology. Note down any new words in a vocabulary notebook as I suggested above and then review this regularly. It will take you a little while, but soon your vocabulary will really expand.

2. Find out what your common grammar mistakes are. Most people make the same grammar mistakes over and over again. When you know what these are, you can review the grammar rules, practice online and fix them.

If you can improve the things above, I am confident that you can increase your band score.

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IELTS Writing Task 2 essay sample 3284 – Band 6.0

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Candidate’s Response:

Recent progress in technology has brought some consequences including environmental problems. It is argued by some that a simpler lifestyle could help to control these problems. Although others believe that technology itself is the solution. I personally think that environmental problem is an urgent matter to address and simplifying people lifestyle is the fastest solution available.

On the one hand, there is this argument that human being is deeply stocked in consumerism culture and decreasing environmental issues can only be achieved by living simpler lives. According to a new study in United States, every person is consuming 6‐times an average person in previous century and produces an even larger scale of wastes. Such attitude leads to a huge invasion of nature to satisfy the need of modern human and to get rid of his wastes. Thus, if everyone lives a simpler life and manage his unnecessary needs, this will result in a cleaner and more stable environment.

On the other hand, some believe that technology itself can be the solution to all the problems human has made so far. Technology progress can help to bring clean sources of energy in hand and recycle most of our daily wastes. For instance, Tesla corporation is producing electricity using vehicles with zero air pollutions and water recycling systems are being employed all over India to decrease soil contamination with water wastes. These methods can massively decrease environmental damages and make earth a sustainable environment again.

All in all, technology can offer practical solutions for environmental problems in a long run, however, in the next few decades they will not be widely available and we need urgent solution for our current issues. I personally think that by controlling the culture of consumerism and living simpler lives, human can save time for technology to offer final solution for saving the environment.

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

January 21, 2024

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Thank you indeed for writing this essay. The essay is successful in identifying the rubric’s main parts and addressing them. The majority of errors (also affecting coherence and cohesion) come from vocabulary and a little more towards grammar. The most prevalent one is “generalization”. To solve this, let’s read the lesson below:

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IELTS Writing Task 2 essay sample 3167 – Band 5.5

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In some area of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult.

What is your opinion on this?

IELTS Writing Task 2 essay sample 3018 – Band 6.0

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Modern communications mean that it is no longer necessary to write letters.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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IELTS Agree/Disagree Essay Sample 6 – Society

In this post, we will look at an agree/disagree essay  example from the IELTS writing task 2 test. Students often ask if the questions are repeated year after year and the answer is no, but the topics are. There are so many questions written each year, you may find your practice answering various questions on different topics. For example, you could write essays to answer questions about education or the environment, which benefits you because you learn vocabulary associated with those topics and develop ideas that can help you in your writing test.

Practising writing IELTS task 2 essays  on a range of topics is a great way to learn new vocabulary for those topics, but also to practice your essay structures . You begin to develop your ideas around those topics, thinking of examples and giving your opinions.

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Many people believe that the preservation of community libraries should be discontinued since there are numerous search engines, programs and apps that can perform the same purpose. This essay believes that public libraries are still very important because books are a more reliable source than the internet. Firstly, this essay will discuss the benefits of having free community libraries and secondly the detrimental effects of using the internet as a source.

On the one hand, libraries are a great place for assisting learning. There are many students who visit these kinds of establishments because they know they can find books that can help them in gaining specialist knowledge that can assist them in reaching their aspirations. In addition, many families from third world countries cannot afford to buy their own personal computer so students often do their assignments in the comfort of a free library.  For example, a survey conducted by the University of the Philippines in 2011 revealed that 8 out of 10 Filipino high school students in Manila use the library to complete work using both the books and computers.

On the other hand, many students now prefer to use the internet as their main source of information. This is not always reliable, as most of the information found on the internet is either fake or written by unknown sources. When researching a topic, books are a much more reliable source, as they are often written by known academics or researchers. using sources found on the internet is often unacceptable in many schools and colleges. For instance, a report from the municipality of Manila in 2018 revealed that 80% of the residents used the public library to study, using reference books as their main source. 

In conclusion, although computers have helped to make our lives easier they cannot replace the importance of having the chance to read books that facilitate improving one’s imagination. The government should continue to maintain the operations of public libraries for this is a vital place of learning for students and more importantly to children who belong to less fortunate families.

(Word count – 347 / Band score – 8)

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• Task Achievement  – The essay provides an answer to the question asked, supported by relevant examples.
• Coherence and Cohesion  – The answer has been divided into clear logical paragraphs and each main body paragraph only has one main idea. There are cohesive links between the main body paragraphs .
• Lexical Resource  – There is evidence of a wide range of vocabulary, with no errors in the text.
• Grammatical Range and Accuracy  – The answer has no grammatical errors. The sentences have a wide range of structures. 

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The world has many towns and cities constructed in previous centuries that were more suitable and livable for people in those times than they are now. what problems will this cause what can be done to solve these problems, online films streaming has become the latest entertainment option for people, especially after the covid-19 pandemic that happened two years earlier. what is the cause for this phenomenon will online films streaming outweigh the popularity of going directly to a cinema, people in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and ilegal drugs, and at an early age, some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a bad example. discuss the cause and effects of widespread drug abuse by young people. make any recommendations you feel are necessary to help fight youth drug abuse., many countries today are experiencing high levels of migration from rural areas to cities. what are the causes of this trend, and what effects does it have on the existing city dwellers, nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. what problems can lack of sleep cause what can be done about lack of sleep tiredness darkcircles, nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. what problems can lack of sleep cause what can be done about lack of sleep 1)tiredness 2)dark circles, nowadays the differences between countries are becoming less evident because we see the same tv shows, advertisements, fashion and follow the same brands.  to what extent the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages, present a written argument or case study to an educational reader with no specialised knowledge of the following topic: the overuse of natural resources causes an ultimate exhaust of them. people have been using them to be in the swim of new styles such as making new furniture of recent design. this causes a huge harm to the environment. therefore, the government should discourage people the overuse of these resources. to what extent do you support or oppose the idea, many experts have noted that people in modern society do not exercise often. what is a cause and solution to this problem , countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. do yout think this is a positive or negative development, teenage pregnancy is on the rise in many countries. why is this what measures (มาตรการ) are there to tackle (จัดการ) this problem, write about shopping. would you prefer shopping in a store or shopping on the internet (online) what are the benefits of your choice what are the possible problems of your choice, childhood obesity is a serious problem in many countries. what are the causes of this, and how can the problem be managed, at the present time, many population prefer to converse with each other by using social networks and phones to call because of this traditional aspects of communication are becoming smaller today. the majority of individuals imagine that this is reducing public's ability to interface correctly when they are meeting in person in real life. from my point of view, i agree that nation need to associate in real life without the internet., many young children have unsupervised access to the internet and are using the internet to socialize with others. what problems do children face when going online without parental supervision how can these problems be solved, the movements of people from the villages to the cities for work has caused a lots of problems in both places. what are the serious problems associated with this what measures can be taken to solve these problems, the gap between the rich and the poor has been enlarged in recent years. what are the causes and solutions for this problem, in some parts of the world traditional festivals and celebrations have disappeared or are disappearing. what problems is this causing what measures could be taken to counter this situation, the internet has changed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems the did not exist before. what are the problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest, the percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20 % in the last 10 years. discuss the causes and effects.

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